(No Title Yet) - Very New Idea

[Princess Shaman]

Okay, when I said "very new idea", I meant that it just came to me a little while ago, so I don't have the details down. It's about an android, name Ameretat who was created by a man name Vincent. In the past, Vincent's very close female friend, Serenity, died, but he couldn't get over that. So instead, he uses the lab and some money from his father's big company [not sure what company it would be yet] to create an android to take her place. Only later, he learns that Ameretat could never be Serenity even though she tries so hard to keep who she calls her master happy.

I don't really have the plot fully down, but I did write out Ameretat's point of view. Tell me what you think and, if it's a really good idea, I could start to lay out the plot and all.

My name is Serenity or that is the name of the girl I was created to replace after her death. So please, don’t let my young appearance distract you. My real name is Ameretat, meaning immortality. I am an android with a purpose to make my master, Vincent, happy. He was the one who wanted to create me for this one single purpose: to take the place of his best friend and I will do anything to make that wish come true. I must. For him.

My first memory was me sealed in a tube of a mysterious liquid that surrounded my body. Wired were attached all over my body. Computers surrounded the tube. I had no memories. I was like a newborn child opening her eyes for the first time. And like a baby, my vision was unclear. A voice stood out to me, though he didn’t talk directly.

“Ameretat has awoken. Out hard work will finally bring results. Serenity is born again.”

Immediately, I knew who owned that voice.

"Master…?”

That was then. A time when I didn’t know who I was, and this is now. I live to fulfill Vince’s wish with all that I can because he is that important to me. I’ll be everything Serenity was if it makes my master happy. But what if I can’t? How can you truly make someone happy by being someone you’re not?

No, I am who I am. I am Serenity and that’s what Vince wants. So... so why do I feel so cold and down when I am not like Serenity at all? What do humans call this feeling? It doesn’t matter to me. I am not human at all. I am an android programmed to show my master Serenity not Ameretat. Ameretat means nothing to him… right?

[Isolde Michi]

Ooh~
This sounds really cool! X3

[rasuel]

Wow, that is very interesting, and a little sad at the same time.

[chiyoko]

I've heard of something extremely simliar, and some mildly similar, before. But if you like the story idea, you should continue with it.

[sakuto]

!!!!


wow. I know what it sounds like. And I'm surprised I remember it, too.




It sounds like the first pokemon movie!

A bunch of scientists in a lab have Mewtwo in a tube filled with liquid and computers all around. Mewtwo overhears their conversations, that they've created a pokemon like mew. So Mewtwo wonders what his true purpose is yada yada yada blows crap up and escapes

ok...I don't know if that last part has anything to do with it, but it's very similar

[Gwen]

Reminds me partially of a game I once played; but I think it could turn out really well. (Also remeinds me of Chobits, but we can deviate from there)

[Princess Shaman]

Wow, the Pokemon thing never came to me when I wrote that. I didn't notice at all. And, yea, the idea is kind of similar to Chobits, but I'm trying to steer away from that to make it seem more original.

[kitty]

I love it ^_^
It sounds sad.. really it does.
It's interesting though!
Does the andriod fall inlove with her master? *ish one of the visions that came into Kitty's mind*


>_> Yesh, it sounds like Chobits.. you know.. the reltionship between Minoru and Yuzuki.

[sakuto]

well, this isn't one of the ideas played with very often, so it shouldn't be hard to deviate it from where others have gone :3

[mangafandom]

i agree with sakuto i havent seen many manga stories about androids and such,

[Isolde Michi]

Hmm... I forgot to say this, when I last posted, so I'll say it now. =3
I'll be happy to fill in the artist position, if you need one. If not, I can try to help with the advertising, if needed. X3

[Princess Shaman]

Yea, I would need artist or more... once I get this whole plot organized and all. Now that you mention it, I would some character sketches of the characters (I find it hard for me to write when I don't even know what the characters look like ^^

[kitty]

I'd love to help with the sketches ^_^
I just need an idea on how they would look >_>;

[Princess Shaman]

Yay! Thanks! Well so far, I only have three main characters.

Vincent: (in his early 20's) He is very cautious secure about most of the work he does (mostly in the lab). He is the son of a rich company owner, so he always tries to be like his father to impress him. He doesn't enjoy wearing suits and ties, though.

Serenity: (looks about 20) She was the opposite of Vince. She was care-free and instead of working, like to take long breaks taking Vince along for the ride. She always carried a smile on her face no matter where she was.

Ameretat: She mostly looks like Serenity, but there should be something different on her (eg. longer/shorter hair). She's very clumbsy at first, but quickly finds out how to use her human-like body. Like Serenity, she would always smile. Especially when she believes that she made her master, Vince, proud of her again.

I hope that's good enough.

[Isolde Michi]

Hmm... Might I try at the sketches, too?